#SixSunday – Circle of the Butterfly #1

Sadly, I have no more sixes to share from Virgo. I’ll get right on fixing that, but for the meantime, I’ve blown the dust off Circle of the Butterfly. This six part of a lengthy prologue (please don’t shoot me. I wrote this thirteen years ago before I knew when and how to use a prologue.)

Circle is a two-volume, 210k word, fantasy epic with several interwoven stories that are impacted by the destiny/fate of twin girls…one who is murdered at the age of five, the other who spends ten years of her life seeking revenge on the men who killed her sister. One of those men, and the primary object of Jiadexin’s rage, is Anyakar in the scene below. Liasneh, Anyakar’s master, ordered the hit.


Liasneh pulled Anyakar’s sword from his belt as she made her way back around the coffin-like box she had brought. As Colette drew a sharp breath, her dedicated knights entered the throne room, swords drawn, to form a sentry line before her and her oracle sisters. A single sweet clang of metal on stone rang out as all ten points hit the stone floor at once.

Holding her sergeant’s heavy blade carelessly out to the side as if it were a child’s toy, Liasneh grinned and taunted, “This isn’t for them!”

“Sit,” Colette said. Her guardians dropped to their knees and sat upon their heels.


Please check out the other authors at Six Sentence Sunday. Some of my favorites are Sarah BallanceKrystal WadeMonica Enderle PierceSiobhan MuirSarah W.Pippa Jay, Kelly Seguin, and Steven Montano.

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24 thoughts on “#SixSunday – Circle of the Butterfly #1

  1. Intriguing peek at the story! I love this line: A single sweet clang of metal on stone rang out as all ten points hit the stone floor at once. It tells me there's a lot of order, respect, and/or fear in that room.

  2. Nice Six, Wendy! I especially liked the line "A single sweet clang of metal on stone rang out as all ten points hit the stone floor at once." That line really sucked me in. Great work!

  3. I agree, great imagery you've crafted here. I especially loved this line as it not only denoted sound, but a definite motion: " A single sweet clang of metal on stone rang out as all ten points hit the stone floor at once. "

  4. Can I just echo everyone else. The single sound froma ll the sword points hitting the floor at the same time is brilliant, and shows the incredible discipline the guardians have. Great six!

  5. Thank you, everyone for commenting today. I'm SO GLAD you liked that detail with the swords. In the story, there is a tradition among the warriors that serve Colette's kingdom…a sort of mash-up between the Knights Templar and the Jedi. Holy warriors, sacred vows, a life of training with pop quizes to ascertain continued worthiness, deadly challenges…months, even years of monotony and boredom. Colette's guardians were hand picked from the ranks of that tradition…hence the discipline.Thank you, everyone, for commenting today. 🙂

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